Here is the fragment again:

For example, sand-encrusted feet or a cold drink in a sweating bottle.

You correctly identified the fragment as an afterthought phrase. For example, the transition that begins the phrase, is the clue.

To fix this fragment, you could add a subject and verb, like this:

For example, Geraldo will not tolerate sand-encrusted feet or a cold drink in a sweating bottle in his new car.

Or you could use Punctuation Rule 7:

Main Clause + , + Afterthought Transition + Ø + Details.

The correction would look like this:

Geraldo will not tolerate anything messy in his new car, such as sand-encrusted feet or a cold drink in a sweating bottle.

Notice that for example has become such as. It is best to save for example to introduce a main clause. If the afterthought comes at the end of a main clause, change the transition to such as, like, or including.

Enjoy the sound of those bells!

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