Take another look at the original sentence:

The terrified passengers aboard the 747 gripped their armrests as the jet bucked in a bad stretch of turbulence after a ride like this one, everyone knew that five minutes on Disney's Space Mountain would feel like relaxing in a rocking chair.

You wanted to fix it this way:

The terrified passengers aboard the 747 gripped their armrests as the jet bucked in a bad stretch of turbulence, after a ride like this one, everyone knew that five minutes on Disney's Space Mountain would feel like relaxing in a rocking chair.

To add a comma between turbulence and after would cause an equally bad problem, a comma splice. A comma splice occurs when you have two complete sentences joined with just a comma. The terrified passengers aboard the 747 gripped their armrests ... begins the first sentence. After a ride like this one, everyone knew ... starts the second sentence. The spot between turbulence and after needs a stronger break than a mere comma.

You might want to consult the rules for fixing comma splices and fused sentences.

Go back to the sentence to try again.

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