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Sparkling with jewelry conned from ex-boyfriends, Sylvia keeps an eye out for new victims with fat wallets, she still needs a pair of diamond earrings to complement a necklace that she managed to coerce Ricardo into buying.

The comma between wallets and she causes a comma splice. At this spot, there are two complete sentences joined with just a comma. Such a construction is a major writing error. Sylvia keeps an eye out for new victims with fat wallets is one complete sentence. She still needs a pair of diamond earrings ... begins the next complete sentence.

To fix this problem, you could put a period after wallets and capitalize the S for she.

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