Here is the sentence:
Dangling his legs over the water, Tommy sat
on the pier and cried. Infused with his great sadness, the tears hit the
waves and attracted Marina, a beautiful mermaid. Popping out of the ocean
as sleek as a seal, Tommy gasped at the sight. While Marina’s tail
flopped against the wood, which was long, scaly, and metallic blue, she
asked poor Tommy the reason for his pain. Tommy
explained that he had lost the surfing championship, which included a scholarship
to college. Assessing his set as clumsy
and inelegant, not a single compliment was received from the judges. After
Tommy bemoaned his ineptitude on a surfboard, Marina made a proposal: She
would turn him into a merman with the grace and athleticism of a dolphin!
Wielding ancient ocean secrets with a snap of her fingers, a metallic green
tail replaced Tommy’s legs! Diving into the waves, the tail propelled
Tommy through the strong surf. Ecstatic about his new abilities, the training
and advice Marina offered went unheeded. Refusing to use conditioner, for
example, the sun and salt water soon damaged Tommy’s hair, which became
dry and brittle. A dangerous and foolhardy activity, Tommy also insisted
on head bumping the great white sharks that he encountered. Putting straws
up his nose and barking like a walrus did not make Tommy popular when he
had dinner with Neptune, Marina’s father. After thoughtlessly scrambling
endangered sea turtle eggs for breakfast, an apology had to be made not
only to Marina but also to the grieving reptile mother. One day out on a
swim, Tommy drank a root beer and tossed the empty plastic bottle in the
water. Polluting the ocean so carelessly was the last clam shell for Marina.
With an angry snap of her fingers, she replaced Tommy’s tail with
two human legs. Sinking under the waves, Tommy’s legs finally kicked
him to the surface where he gulped a much-needed breath of air. Saying a
curt goodbye, Marina’s tail slapped the surface dismissively as she
dove into the ocean depths. While swimming the mile back to shore as a regular
human being, Tommy regretted the gift that he had squandered.
Which included a scholarship to college, an adjective clause, comes right after championship. Since the championship offered this award, this modifier is in the right place. Well done!