Here is the original item:
His arms full of expensive science fiction
paperbacks,
(A) Cary
remembered (B)
that next semester's tuition was due in two
weeks. (C)
Making a trip to the library instead of the bookstore a better financial
decision.
You wanted to do this:
His arms full of expensive science fiction paperbacks
Cary remembered that next semester's tuition was due in two weeks.
Making a trip to the library instead of the bookstore a better financial
decision.
Removing the comma after paperbacks is incorrect. You must connect an introductory phrase with a comma.
You might want to review the rules.